How was your experience?
First off, I am stoked that local theater is performing locally-written work! Kuddos to Oberman for getting his show on stage, to Strait for directing, and to Avo for accepting the show in their venue! I found the show entertaining overall. Caltrider stole the show with his well-placed over-the-top villian antics, and ginsberg made Claire charming enough to keep my interest. However, there are a couple opportunities for improvement to the show. On the acting front, most took their characters and made them into the comic-like characters I'd expect from a comic-book-esque show. However, the character of Peter seemed a bit subdued in contrast to the others - add in a couple dashes of machismo (viz Captain Hammer from Dr. Horrible's Sing-along Blog) and pinches of excessive animation, and I think he'd capture the audience a lot more. Peter is introduced as one who know what's going on, yet his body language line delivery often muted this first impression. Also, amongst several characters there was excessive pause between lines that hurt the momentum of the show. Given that most of the comedy in the show is dry, the actors need to keep 'em rollin' (lines/jokes) to keep 'em rollin' (audience). Regarding writing, the jokes were in two disjoint styles (comic campiness vs clever innuendos), the plot was over-described, and the ad-hoc slapstick was unnecessary due to the comedy inherent in the main characters. When I first heard the dry jokes where a backhanded compliment is responded to with "Thanks...i think", it set up a comedic expectation of comic book style banter. However, the doubnle entendres, innuendos and sexual references started sneaking in (most of which I really liked and laughed at!), it tampered with the scope of the show and its intended audience. Is this for old school comic enthusiasts who are entertained by dry wit or is this for college boys? Kuddos for making the plot easy to follow (and for the couple twists!). On the same token, there's no need to have the characters rhetorically repeat all of what we know so far or what just happened (i.e. Victor on phone with Lt). I imagine the intention was to help keep the audience up to speed so they'll stay engaged, but I found it most tempting to tune out when the quick monologues came along... Lastly, in the first act, there were several times where those two cops came in with some sideshow slapstick. In my opinion, it added nothing to the show (neither humor nor plot/character development) and therefore only slowed down the momentum. These "interruptions" were disengaging. The show has plenty of comedy built into the characters and situation that there's no need of comic relief like this. I hope these critiques were constructive enough without being too negative! I encourage people to see the show and I look forward to seeing what the writers, directors and actors of this show come up with next!